I posted last time about getting songs and/or lyrics out in front of peers to get a different pair of eyes and ears, a different mind and different slant on my work. This craft is a tough one.
I have been working on a song -- the working title is "Make A Better Man Of Me" -- that tells the story of a man whose relationship with his wife (which personifies how the responsibilities of life, taking care of your wife and kids, keeping your promises) has helped him grow up from a self-oriented kid to a self-sacrificing man.
The first iteration had a good bit of "pictorial" lyric but was shy on background about what had changed to "make a better man of me." After some re-writing, I have taken care of that, but lost some of the pictorial "color". Arrggh! Trying to tell a complete "story" in 32+ lines is tough work! I appreciate the comments of my peers. They have never failed to help me write a better song. Sometimes, though, the "getting there" is a rough go because of the extra help from my friends.
I have been working on a song -- the working title is "Make A Better Man Of Me" -- that tells the story of a man whose relationship with his wife (which personifies how the responsibilities of life, taking care of your wife and kids, keeping your promises) has helped him grow up from a self-oriented kid to a self-sacrificing man.
The first iteration had a good bit of "pictorial" lyric but was shy on background about what had changed to "make a better man of me." After some re-writing, I have taken care of that, but lost some of the pictorial "color". Arrggh! Trying to tell a complete "story" in 32+ lines is tough work! I appreciate the comments of my peers. They have never failed to help me write a better song. Sometimes, though, the "getting there" is a rough go because of the extra help from my friends.
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